Smart Collar
A Watchful Eye
Feedback:
The only feedback I received was the suggestion to wear business attire such as a dress shirt but was also informed that the polo seemed to work just the same. Being in the golf industry for 20 years all my shirts are pretty much polos. I personally think a nice polo is accepted anywhere nowadays and it's definitely required to be worn at high-end private golf clubs where members pay $250,000 just to join the club, not including yearly fees they pay on top of that. I did appreciate the feedback though and in no way was I offended by it.
Change:
I really didn't change anything other than wearing a different color polo shirt. Next pitch I'll wear another different one which will also look nice. The overall length of the pitch seems to be within 5 seconds of what my first pitch was, so that didn't change. I don't usually have to speak in front of many people, so that's something I need to get used to.
Victor, I'm not sure how strict this assignment is on wearing business attire. I would suggest wearing a dress shirt next time because you're pitching a product to people and looking professional completes the look. A polo shirt might work in the golf industry, but I'm not sure if it'll work for an entrepreneur trying to sale their product to investors.
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Your elevator pitch does a great job at summarizing what your product does, and I think the script you wrote for it is well done. Also, you talked slow and didn’t mention your name in the video which is great. For criticism, the pitch would go very well with more expression or hand gestures as your talking, knowing that your passionate through your tone, facial expressions, and body language really helps sell the product.
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